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Your two pieces this year

Language: English Book 1: The Serviceberry Book 3: 1984 Coach: Ace Emerson

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Piece 1 · The Serviceberry

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On the Serviceberry, and What I Owe the Birds

Submitted Aug 28 · 612 words · scored by Ace Emerson
Coach feedback

Daniel — the way you held Kimmerer's serviceberry as both a tree and a thesis is what made this work. Your move from observation to economic claim around paragraph 4 is the sharpest in the cohort. Push on this: where does the gift economy strain in your own life? You hint at it, then pull back. Sit with the strain next time. — Ace

Session takeaway
Focus area · Stay inside the discomfort one paragraph longer.
Key rec · Read Lewis Hyde's "The Gift", chs. 1–3.
Writing Rubric
Structure3/4
Argument3/4
Language4/4
Voice3/4
Ideas3/4
Total16/20

Piece 2 · 1984

Autosave on128 words
Draft · not yet visible to Ace Emerson
Progress
128 words
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